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Old March 9th, 2008, 5:50 pm
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Any feedback greatly appreciated. Thanks.

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Hello!

I find it fascinating that your character is a sculptor. Yet, I have to confess IŽd send hate mail to her father, too, if he abuses animals for other purposes than food.


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I find it fascinating that your character is a sculptor. Yet, I have to confess IŽd send hate mail to her father, too, if he abuses animals for other purposes than food.
Thanks for feeding back

As for your views on the father I was hoping to make that controversal


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I like this story. It seems quiet unique, and I think it is more in a journal sense. I don't know if that was the effect you were going for or not, but that's just how I see it . It is really interesting and I like the feelings she has toward her sister, feeling slightly like the plain duckling. Sebastian better be good to her, though. It sounds as if she really likes him! I'm waiting for more, so happy writing!


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Thanks.

I guess you're right it is kinda journal like, I didn't really intend it, but I guess it's in first person and so is a journal


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Someone posted this in my actual story thread, but am replying here

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Im not here to criticize but i read only first two chapters (is this a short story becuz ur chps reaaaaally short) and found ur story is really simple nothing much happening....i actually got bored and didnt want to move further......

i advise is that nowadays people like the unexpected, nonreality stuff......so try a fantasy or a fiction story.....or try putting aliens in this story.....lolz
Thanks for your feedback. I'm hoping I'll be able to make it into a full story once it's actually at it's finished point (what I've been posting is really just a first draft), but for now at least it is a short story.

It's never been intended as a fantasy story (although I am working on one of those too) but is meant to be somewhat realistic, like the stories I generally like to read. Obviously that's not right for everyone though


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Hi everyone (if there's anybody out there!). I've stopped work on The Sculptor for now. I was happy enough with the plot but was having some trouble with recent chapters, and am not as pleased as I could be with a few of my more recent chapters which I have managed to write. However I have been working on a new story which is complete in a draft form and has a second draft in the works. I would love your feedback on my first draft which I'm posting on here gradually to just stay ahead of my editing. You can find the story The Accident here. It's similar in writing style to The Sculpter and has some similar themes but is more of a mystery story. It basically involves a guy who has a mysterious accident of a secluded road and then tries to work out what happened to him.

I plan to come back to The Sculpter at some point as it's a story which has been a part of my life in a way since I was at school about 5 years ago and I still know it can be decent. I may scrap it and start again or I may try to carry on from where I left off. I will see when the time comes. Thanks to everyone who has read The Sculpter, and especially those who have left feedback. I'm sorry I've had to abandon it before the end.


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