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Originally Posted by Tiberius
It's all about body language. Don't say that a character was falling in love with another character. Say that the character did things, like a flick of the hair, or noticed things about the other character that imply there's a deeper attraction. You have to be very careful though, because it would be very easy to go overboard and make it too obvious.
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When they're in the "friend zone," I'd have them
not noticing flicks of the hair or the particular color of their eyes or cut of their clothing or anything. Focusing on those little details implies to me as a reader that the person noticing such details is spending an awful lot of time staring at their just-friend. When things become more romantic I'd have them begin noticing things, as Harry remembers that Ginny doesn't hang out with him, Ron and Hermione at school like she does at the Burrow (he's noticing her absences, something he's never done before), or remembering the smell of her perfume (which he's never noticed before), or feeling that pang of jealously when he sees her kissing Dean which wouldn't happen unless he had romantic feelings for her.
The revelation of love is as important, IMO, as the preamble when you're drilling it in to the reader's brain that they're just friends.
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Originally Posted by Seeker07
There's this scene in my book where Maggie (the main character) is being followed by theses drunk dudes, and a guy from her school (tristan) comes to the rescue in his car. Tristan and Maggie are sort of friends. And Maggie isn't looking for a relationship, but I don't really know how to say that, she just wants to become better friends with him and nothing more.
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You could do this by having your main character talking to a girlfriend and have the girlfriend say something like "Tristan is so cute! Are you going to go out with him now?" and your main character replied, "No, it's not like that. He's alright but he's no [insert previously mentioned dream hunk of the story or your main character's current crush]" to show that her interest in Tristan isn't romantic.
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Originally Posted by HersheyLipGloss
I think, mainly just avoid sudden revelations that one realizes about the other.Such as, "I never knew (girl's) eyes were so blue. They are like a stormy sea, but on her, they are beautiful." or "I just grabbed his hand, like I've done so many times before. This time, it was different. I felt a little shock, and it almost made me flinch." See? That's dripping with emotion. You might try, "I looked into her eyes, and saw that stormy blue that I was so familiar with stare back at me. I found comfort in that, and knew things would never change between us." and " I grabbed his hand, like I always did when I was scared. I felt the hard rough calluses under his fingers, and the smooth soft skin of his palm. I felt that, and they reminded me that even with the world falling down, we will never change, and he will always be my best friend."
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Where friends are concerned I would leave out descriptions such as "particular shade of stormy blue" or whatever. People don't often ponder the exact shade of their friends' eyes. I couldn't even tell you for sure what color my best friend's eyes are and she's been my best friend for.... 9 years. Eyes, to me, are a no-go zone as far as friendship goes, it implies too much dreamy gazing at each other, too much studying of minute details.
After all, where Harry is concerned, we have a zillion more descriptions of Hermione's unflattering attributes than we have of her flattering ones. We constantly hear about her frizzy hair and her buck teeth, her bossy nature, etc. But where Cho or Ginny are concerned we get comments about how pretty they are, how nicely they smell, the descriptions suddenly get more sensory and are less purely visual and purely things that anyone could spot from five to ten feet away (frizzy hair, buck teeth, etc.)
Maybe that's a good way to think of it: descriptions of ones friends tend to be of things that are easily visible or easily described from five to ten feet away whereas descriptions of a romantic interest are much more intimate and more sensory. Just a thought.