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Old March 20th, 2008, 8:09 pm
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Feedback - The Hands of the Poet

Ok, If you read the first sentence of my story and would like to read more, post here.
(I hope you do not oppose to becoming characters.)


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Old April 15th, 2008, 3:49 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

I'm afraid to say I'm fast approaching the section of story that needs you guys. If you liked the story, tell me about it, please please!


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Old May 17th, 2008, 10:10 am
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

I don´t know I might be completly wrong, but this conversation in the prologue was that between laudie and one of her fictional characters?

Anyway, I´d need someone like nathalie at my side now.

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Old May 17th, 2008, 7:13 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

No it wasn't... the Mistress, or The Poet, is an actual person. She's also called The Muse. She's going to come in a little more pretty soon. It's a "saving the world" type story. Have you ever read the poem "The Poet Sings?" That's what I based this story off of. I don't know who wrote it, but here it is, in the version of the song:

She's somewhere in the sunlight strong
her tears are in the falling rain
she calls me in the wind's soft song
And with the flowers she comes again
the loneliness and misery
are silenced by a melody
she's somewhere and I hear her sing
Her words in timeless memory:
"Stay the course, light a star
change the world where'r you are.

Somewhere the night wind carries her
A silver moonbean lights her way
Antares is her messanger
And every sun and moon her stay.
Dark voices from the shadows call
But listen and her voice recall—Moriah!
"stay the course, light a star
Change the world where'r you are.


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Old May 19th, 2008, 7:56 am
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

oh, that makes me curious.


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Old May 24th, 2008, 9:16 am
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

I´m sligthly confused. There was no hint that you updated. Or did I just overlook your fifth post thelast time i read your story.

Anyway I like it very much.


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Old May 24th, 2008, 5:49 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

My computer did something funky on the update before last and stuck it on the end of the post before the post before last, if that makes any sense at all.


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Old May 25th, 2008, 6:59 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

Weird. Luckily that seems to happen more often so I check despite the grey stone.
Will there be a new update soon?


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Old May 25th, 2008, 8:40 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

If I can get my head on straight, yes!

I plotted it out on my bathroom mirror last night (insomnia is a wonderful thing, is it not?) so I know what's going to happen, but I've got a field trip soon, so I won't be on for a few days.


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Old June 2nd, 2008, 9:03 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

I love you

In fact I like short posts, though this one was really short.

But interesting....

I´ll go and toy around with my own story here, because it´s nothing serious I can post very short posts without feeling ashame. Maybe you´d like to leave feedback for me......


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Old June 2nd, 2008, 10:28 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

You're welcome.

it's a minor thing, but somewhat important later on. Not to mention fun to think about. Actually, D-C-ver is an important person in the story whom you will meet in a few posts without realizing it.


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Old June 4th, 2008, 6:50 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

I´ll go and re-read what he/she said.


Ah, the only one who said something nice....

I wonder what would happen if someone posts a one-sentence-story here on CoS.


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Old June 4th, 2008, 9:02 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

They would be slaughtered. But it's not impossible. There's an exercise where you have to write a three word story, and that is hard for me.


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Old June 4th, 2008, 9:45 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

What about: "She lived long" or "He killed happily"
na, hm, well

Interesting update. It´s becoming a really complex story. GREAT


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Old June 10th, 2008, 10:30 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

"I have updated."

enjoy


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Old June 11th, 2008, 3:27 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

I shivered when I read it, so scary!


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Old June 12th, 2008, 8:34 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

A note about the rings and hands: Before each force (Poet and Antonym) can reach full power, they must find eight people. They call these people their 'fingers' and they combine with two permanent servants ("thumbs") to make their Hands, called so because they do a lot of work for their master on an earthly level. All fingers must be found before the final battle can begin. Take the Poet for instance. Each of her actual fingers stands for a person finger. The rings that appear tell her which of her people is ready to come into their power and be told about their fate. Her cosmic band finger, or right-hand middle finger, is the place of the Reader, who holds very different powers than any other finger. All fingers are unique. Oh, and Cosmic stands for right, because all fingers on the right hand have to do with powers beyond earth. Terra would be the left, because all Terra fingers have powers linked with the earth. Moriah, the wind, is her Terra thumb, and Antares, the star, is her Cosmic thumb. They are the only nonhuman fingers. Power Finger: Index. Still Finger: middle. Band finger: Ring. and Touch Finger: pinky. Sorry to be so long winded, but I wanted to clear up any potential confusion.

Oh, and I hope you like the Antagonist and his Cronies, Halley and Lobia. Try to guess what they are!


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Old June 12th, 2008, 9:58 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

which one were their true names? didn´t he use two names for the poet?

halley is his cosmic thumb or is she??

I´m not good at guessing.


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Old June 13th, 2008, 12:24 am
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

Seelee was a nickname, somewhat short for Cihuapilli. that's pronounced see-wah-pee-lee. It's Nahuatl, Ancient Aztec, for princess or lady.

Halley is his cosmic finger. Halley's Comet. As for the little girl, The poet states all the thumb's true forms.


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Old June 14th, 2008, 8:58 pm
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Re: Feedback: The Hands of the Poet

the guy who is in school with laudie has he anything to do with the hands?


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