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Re: Fan Scripts: Remake Harry Potter
Um, can anyone think of a good idea of showing it is Harry's Birthday? I really like how Kloves did it, but can't really think of anything else.
--- Once again, where is everyone. Am I talking to myself? Because I couldn't think of anything different, I ended up doing something similar. Harry's Bday: ![]() Last edited by ArryGrotter; October 20th, 2007 at 3:42 am. |
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Re: Fan Scripts: Remake Harry Potter
The Next Scene (With no Cuts AT ALL)
Be Afraid. Be Very Afraid The It-doesn't-leave-out-anything Hut-on-the-Rock scene: ![]() |
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Re: Fan Scripts: Remake Harry Potter
ArryGrotter, you're film will probably be about 6 hours long... it's simply too long. I suggest you make a lot of cuts. The official version is much better.
I'm write now working on a DH script. It has a lot less cuts then my previous scripts (I ended up including stuff like Lily's letter). I hope you'll enjoy it and give me feedback. here it is: DH Script - Until Kreacher: ![]() |
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Re: Fan Scripts: Remake Harry Potter
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Things I didn't like: The cut from "I want some info, Olivander" to the title was weird (but got understanderable slightly later.) Dobby the WAITRESS?? ![]() I did like the adaption for T___ Court Road (Can't remember what it's called) and many other things as well. |
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Re: Fan Scripts: Remake Harry Potter
I've cut this scene a bit, but am unsure what else to cut. I wanted to cut the food, but couldn't figure out how. Help?
PS:Hut-on-the-rock Some cuts but more needed: ![]() Last edited by ArryGrotter; October 28th, 2007 at 1:40 am. Reason: Format reasons/Fix |
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Re: Fan Scripts: Remake Harry Potter
I thought up this last night
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More cuts, more needed. HELP!!!: ![]() Now that I cut the food I have rid of this mention: RUBEUS HAGRID Couldn’t make us a cup o’ tea, could yeh? It’s not been an easy journey... 2001-Movie did this well with him saying: "Sorry about that". I can't think of anything to replace it, and it doesn't flow well with nothing there. --- Recently I was thinking about Quidditch in the OotP movie (or lack of) and influence me to write this: I'm reading PoA at the moment, so I decided to script a scene from there.When I script PoA, this scene will need to be cut a bit Last edited by ArryGrotter; November 4th, 2007 at 5:43 am. |
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I wrote this all today. It is all first draft, i.e. NOTHING cut, except maybe a couple of lines here and there.
This is exactly like the books. I will cut it quite a bit: ![]() Last edited by ArryGrotter; November 26th, 2007 at 11:17 pm. |
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Re: Fan Scripts: Remake Harry Potter
The main problem I see with most of these scripts is that you are trying to add everything from the book, and if it isn't exactly from the book, it is a slight change. Half the reason why these things weren't in the movies were because they are so incredibly boring. One scene I would like to see added, however, is the Dursleys in GoF.
This looks like a lot of fun, so be expecting to see me in a day or two with my DH script. ![]() |
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GoF is a script I can't wait to do. That movie is awful now I've seen it 1,000,000 times. Can't wait to see your script! |
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Re: Fan Scripts: Remake Harry Potter
Oh, it isn't just you, but yes, I see where you are cutting. I myself may have a problem with cutting things, but mostly, I think I can manage making it different from the books but keeping the story line like Kloves and the other guy *forgot his name momentarily* have done.
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I can't wait for DH.
I hope the lead up of the final battle is along the lines of this.: ![]() --- Because I MIGHT need to split DH into 2: ![]() Also, for some reason I was wondering why Dumbledore knew Moody was Barty Crouch Jr (He asked for Winky) and then I remembered about Occlumency. So I plan to write, um, Harry and Cedric's return, I suppose the scene is, including a part when Dumbledore stops trusting "Mad-Eye". I will probably write it tomorrow. Last edited by ArryGrotter; November 6th, 2007 at 9:10 am. |
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Maybe my script IS a bit too long...
Cause the page count was 30 for chapters 1-4, and I've written half of chapter 5 and now it's 45. I look at my first draft of 1-4. That was 52. Therefore (about to do maths) 52/30=1.733333333333333333333333333 (52+14)/1.7333333333333333333333333333=39.23076923........ .. Um, 40 pages for 5 chapters. Therefore 40/5=8 8*17=136 136 paged script. It is leaning on the long side. |
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I am now on study leave, so after my exams I will finish my first draft of PS and edit it PROPERLY. (Can I emphasise that enough?)
Below is as far as I've got with the first draft: Please don't say that it is exactly like the boook. I know it is. I just haven't got round to cutting it yet.: ![]() |
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Since Hagrid being expelled is more important to CoS:
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Re: Fan Scripts: Remake Harry Potter
About the death of Voldemort... I was actually thinking how this should be like.
BELLATRIX topples to the ground, and in slow-motion, Voldemort turns to watch her die. VOLDEMORT: NO!!! (not a cheesy "NO!" but a very scary, insane "NO!") He turns and waves the ELDER WAND, and tendrils of light spary everywhere, hurling MCGONGALL, SLUGHORN, AND SHACKLEBOLT over the Great Hall. VOLDEMORT turns to MOLLY, furious. HE raises the wand, and just as the Killing Curse was said, HARRY pulls the Cloak off. Now in regular motion. HARRY: PROTEGO! A massive shield explodes in the middle of the Hall, and as everybody turns to see who'd done it, HARRY steps out of the crowd. VOLDEMORT turns to see HARRY, and he hisses. The magical ceiling now turns to a deep violet color, and a hint (very slight) of the sun is starting to rise. It's very subtle. They start circling each other. The crowd stumbles backward, making a circle in the hall. Several DEATH EATERS Apparate between the people, turning in confusion. One of them looks at Voldemort, gestures, but with a look from VOLDEMORT, he clambers back in rank. VOLDEMORT: Harry Potter. So yet again, you escaped Death. HARRY: (raises a hand quickly) Don't help. It's got to be like this, just you and me. VOLDEMORT: You don't mean that, Potter. You snivel and hide behind the skirts of greater people, hiding away from me. HARRY: You thought so. But you're wrong. I did that to protect everybody, from your harm. Remember my mother, Lily? The blood she gave up protected me from you... until- VOLDEMORT: I came back! You're not protected anymore! HARRY: Yes, you're right... but don't you see? I've done the same thing... for everybody who've fought you tonight. You don't know anything, do you, Riddle? VOLDEMORT: (growls) You dare to- HARRY: Yes. You never learn from your mistakes, Tom Riddle. Now, before you make yet another mistake, try to feel remorse... VOLDEMORT: What is this? (looks shocked briefly) HARRY: I've seen what you will become. Be a man... VOLDEMORT: You're lying! I, Lord Voldemort, possesses the powerful wand ever to touch Wizarding history! We don't have that Phoenix core protection anymore, we duel on skills, alone! HARRY: Be careful. You think you're powerful? VOLDEMORT: I BROUGHT UPON THE DEATH OF ALBUS DUMBLEDORE! HARRY: You thought so, yet you're wrong. The crowd reacts, and whisperings start. They are cut off by VOLDEMORT. VOLDEMORT: He is dead, on this grounds, rotting in the tomb! I saw it myself! HARRY: He never got murdered. He made a fatal mistake and arranged the whole thing with the man you thought was your faithful servant... Severus Snape. He stopped working for you once you killed my mother... she was the only person Snape ever truly loved. VOLDEMORT: Silence! What does it matter, then, as both are dead! On my own doings! HARRY: Really? Well, when Malfoy disarmed Dumbledore on the evening he died... that wand you're holding, the master of that is Draco Malfoy. VOLDEMORT: I can attend to Draco after this! You speak nonsense, and you're stalling your death! HARRY: But... I overtook Malfoy weeks ago and took his wand. (holds up wand) Does that wand you hold know its master was disarmed? Because if it does... then I am the master of the Elder Wand. The sun finally rises, and the magical ceiling turns a shocking orange-yellow. VOLDEMORT: AVADA KEDVARA! HARRY: EXPELLARMIUS! The jets of the spells collides, then they breaks up. Shots of light bursts from the connected jet of light. Voldemort growls, but then he looks fearful- as the Elder Wand flicks away out of his hand- a green jet shot out- it hits Voldemort in the chest- a booming explosion echoes as Voldemort kneels. A moment, then suddenly jets of light burst from his chest. Voldemort's body withers, then his robe turns into smoke, and his body along disappears in a smoky fog. The Death Eaters panics, and attempts to Disapparate, but the Order quickly gathers them up. Last edited by Dementor13; November 27th, 2007 at 12:00 am. |
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I definately think that Voldemort's "No" can't be chessy. I actually think that the thread name is mis-leading, as not all the movies have actually been made yet. I think I'll change it (for the 10th time ![]() Anyway, about my script. I've decided to write a treatment before continuing. Here's what I've done: PS Treatment: ![]() |
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Otherwise, though, it's not bad at all. ![]()
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Re: Fan Scripts: Script your version of Harry Potter
OK, I've done a rewrite of the following scene, though one line I really want to shorten and don't know how.
It's shorter than before (by two pages according to the page count): ![]() |
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Re: Fan Scripts: Script your version of Harry Potter
Thanks! I've edited the mentioned above.
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