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Old November 26th, 2007, 11:42 pm
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Re: Fan Scripts: Script your version of Harry Potter

OK, I've done a rewrite of the following scene, though one line I really want to shorten and don't know how.

It's shorter than before (by two pages according to the page count):    


  
PS: Diagon AlleyINT. HUT-ON-THE-ROCK - MORNING
(1/8/1991)

Hagrid's coat falls of Harry. An owl is tapping at the window, carrying a newspaper. Harry gets up and opens it and the owl drops the newspaper and attacks Hagrid's coat.

HARRY POTTER
Hagrid! There's an -- owl!

RUBEUS HAGRID
(Grunting in his sleep)
Give him five Knuts.

HARRY POTTER
Knuts?
RUBEUS HAGRID
Little bronze coins. Look in the pockets.

Harry tries one of the many pockets in Hagrid's coat and the owl hops out of the way. He withdraws keys and slug pellets, then strange looking coins. Harry gives the owl the money and he flies off. Harry's mouth is open in astonishment. Hagrid is now up

RUBEUS HAGRID (CONT’D)
Best be off, Harry, lots ter do today, gotta buy all yer stuff fer school.

Harry looks down at the coins still in his hands.

HARRY POTTER
Um, Hagrid? I haven't got any money - and you heard Uncle Vernon last night … he won't pay for me to go and learn magic.

RUBEUS HAGRID
Don't worry about that. D'yeh think yer parents didn't leave yeh anything? First stop fer us is Gringotts. Wizards' bank.

HARRY POTTER
Wizards have banks?

RUBEUS HAGRID
Just the one. Gringotts. Run by goblins.

HARRY POTTER
Goblins?

RUBEUS HAGRID - This is the line I want to cut shorter...
Yeah - so yeh'd be mad ter try an' rob it. Never mess with goblins, Harry. Gringotts is the safest place in the world - 'cept maybe Hogwarts. As a matter o' fact, I gotta visit Gringotts anyway. Fer Dumbledore. Hogwarts business. He usually gets me ter do important stuff fer him. Fetchin' you gettin' things from Gringotts - knows he can trust me, see. Got everythin'? Come on, then.

I/E. ROWBOAT - MORNING
(A LITTLE LATER) (1/8/1991)

Hagrid taps the boat with his umbrella and it rows itself towards land. He then proceeds to unfold the newspaper (The Daily Prophet). Turning a page, Hagrid says:

RUBEUS HAGRID
Ministry o' Magic messin' things up as usual.

HARRY POTTER
There's a Ministry of Magic? But what does a Ministry of Magic do?

RUBEUS HAGRID
Well, their main job is to keep it from the Muggles that there's still witches an' wizards up an' down the country.

HARRY POTTER
Why?

RUBEUS HAGRID
Why? Blimey, Harry, everyone'd be wantin' magic solutions to their problems. Nah, we're best left alone.

The boat sails further.

HARRY POTTER
Why would you be mad to try and rob Gringotts?

RUBEUS HAGRID
Spells - enchantments. They say there's dragons guardin' the high security vaults. And Gringotts is hundreds of miles under London, deep under the Underground. Yeh'd die of hunger tryin' ter get out.

HARRY POTTER
Hagrid, did you say there are dragons at Gringotts?

RUBEUS HAGRID
Well they say so.
(beat)
Crikey, I'd like a dragon.

HARRY POTTER
You'd like one?

RUBEUS HAGRID
Wanted one ever since I was a kid.
(he resumes reading the newspaper)
Still got your letter, Harry?

Harry takes it out.

RUBEUS HAGRID (CONT’D)
Good. There's a list there of everything yeh need.

The letter is unfolded. Harry skims each section and reads aloud the last, gaining in volume:

HARRY POTTER
(puzzled slightly)
1 wand, 1 cauldron, 1 set glass or crystal phials, 1 telescope, 1 set brass scales.

Harry looks up at Hagrid

HARRY POTTER (CONT’D)
Can we find all this in London?

RUBEUS HAGRID
If yeh know where to go.

The boat bumps against the edge of the coast.
  



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