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Old September 9th, 2007, 5:48 am
CleanSweepSeven  Female.gif CleanSweepSeven is offline
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Re: The next Harry Potter Remake

I really liked how you did a zoom out from Vernon's extremely boring tie.

There was a mistake, though. The book said "Dudley learned a new word, 'shan't". I assume this means it was not his first word.

Also, you repeated the sentence "About why he's disappeared?" (McGonagall to Dumbledore)


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